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Post by Annie on Jan 17, 2005 18:28:16 GMT -5
Heh. You could pretend it was supposed to be that way. Gotta love those cliff-hangers.  |
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Tracy
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[.^~*Cieday: 7/06/04*~^.] *Settled as a European Wildcat*
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Post by Tracy on Jan 19, 2005 18:45:38 GMT -5
Hello there, I too feel dumb asking this, but...
Fan fic: hmmm does that mean I must write something that involves a character from the HDM series? or can I make my own and set them in that world? Just wondering... ;D
Yeah, right...
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Post by Tyrannus et Callida on Jan 20, 2005 19:37:46 GMT -5
You can make your own, but be quick. Not much time left.
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Post by Tyrannus et Callida on Feb 1, 2005 18:11:27 GMT -5
Okay, time's just about up. All entries, finished or not, must be sent in NOW. Since nobody asked me for the final judging position, I will fill it myself.
As soon as I recieve the first entry, the judging shall begin!
EDIT: Okay, Lee/Behemoth/Rabbit boy/Bunny/Ghost just sent me an entry that was disqualified because of vulgar material. Just so she knows, it's already been reported to Okibi.
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Post by cock of teh walk on Feb 1, 2005 21:14:45 GMT -5
What?! It was disqualified? But I posted it on the forum awhile ago and no one had a problem with it.
If you could be so kind as to pm me and point out the so called ' vulgar' parts, I think you could see this is just a misunderstanding.
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Post by Spiral Sun on Feb 2, 2005 3:24:27 GMT -5
TU, I'll take the final judging spot if you want, I would've liked it as well but I thought I wouldn't say incase anyone else wanted it. But you can have it, just if you don't want it or if your too busy I thought I might just say. Rabbit boy, which thread is it in? I can't be bothered to find it but I'd still like to check it out, curiosity  |
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Post by cock of teh walk on Feb 2, 2005 16:57:44 GMT -5
I deleted it awhile ago. the thread was dead and I didnt like my story floating freely on the internet. Im terribly jealous and protecting that way. Ill pm it to you though.
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Post by Cat on Feb 2, 2005 17:25:31 GMT -5
I'm curious now too.  |
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Post by Tyrannus et Callida on Feb 2, 2005 20:54:54 GMT -5
I don't care how anyone else feels about it, I found it vulgar and extremely offensive. I... it... it just is offensive to me. I don't care if anyone else decides to vote on it, but I found it extremely offensive. I'll let Spiral take the last position for judging, but if you do want me to vote, I, because it was so extremely offensive to me, would give it a zero.
One score zero for offending me more than anything or anyone ever has in my entire life. I can't say exactly why, but it just is so extremely offensive to me. To that, I say bravo. You achieved the impossible and ruined my disposition for what would be a very long time, had I not something that brings me happiness beyond measure. My decision was rash, but I believe it right.
Grammar=0
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Post by Annie on Feb 2, 2005 21:50:34 GMT -5
That's creepy. o.o
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Post by cock of teh walk on Feb 2, 2005 21:56:52 GMT -5
Uh, I really don't know what to say about that. I suppose you feel a bit embarrassed about your quick desicion and are trying to back it up by stating it was ' extremely offensive' a complete of FOUR times in such a small post.
Theres no need togive me a score unless you are re-entering my story in the competition. Is that what your doing, or is that just you being petty?
Ill just note you never pm'ed me telling me what was wrong with it in the first place, although Okibi did, she is not the one who disqualified me.
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Post by Spiral Sun on Feb 2, 2005 23:59:56 GMT -5
YEAH! I get 2 judging spots :3 hee hee!
Well, hmmmmmm, Rabbit boy, I wouldn't call it offensive since I've read stuff that makes yours look like an early teens story, but don't take that as an offence. Gee, even the book we're studying in English is worse than that with over 4 intimate sex scenes. One is well, really bad...
I may as well judge it since I have time on my hands now...
Originality: 5
Sequence: 4
I try to mark hard so don't take the marks to close to heart.
I think it's an original interpretation of sleeping beauty (?, I don't know the Prince & fool, but sleeping beauty sounds simmilar so I'll give you marks fo that) but the way you've included dæmons is a bit unusual for my tastes, but I can see it in a metephorical sense, but I'm not sure if you were attempting to achieve that. The imagry and descriptive terms you've used are good, but that's not my area but you get a mark for the originality of them, such as "Auswitchz survivor." Which is an original way of a starved person.
The sequence sounds like prose fiction. (poetry based), it flows but every here and there it's a bit chunky, where you've missed out on needed information. I've got no problem for why the girl's there, but as to why it's happened to her is needed. Unless it is really in a metaphorical sence, but still I find it hard to pick up so it'd need to be more obviouse.
I can see why TU has given you a bad grammer score though, your story is simmilar to how you post, without many capitals. So I think that could be part of the reason, other than him being ticked off, but I'm not sure.
As to your disqualification (but you've still been marked) I can see why, in future try not to keep things vulger and maybe aim at a lower audience because while artistically sex and nudity is acceptable it needs to have a certain composition to it. I can't really explain it but I hope you understand. However it does sound as though the dæmon is tourtured and that can be highly offencive if there isn't an explanation, sort of like how it can be painful to see an injustice. So that'd maybe be why TU is offended, (sorry TU for making assumptions, I'm just thinking as I'm writing). If it was re-edited to a degree with certain things taken into account then maybe you could get it through but I think with your tastes and your protectiveness to your work would probably not be able to do it beause you don't want to, but I'm only guessing. I hope my criticism has helped and in future you keep the audience in mind.
Have a nice day ^-^
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Post by cock of teh walk on Feb 3, 2005 0:36:20 GMT -5
eee...howzabout we leaves the judging till AFTER I know whether Im actually in the contest huh?
Which I doubt I am, so no need for the contrsuctional criticism.
I should point out, my writing, much like my life, is focused around ME, what I ENJOY, how i WANT to write , how I FEEL like writing. I have no interest in readers , what readers want to see, what they find offensive.
What I said was, if you are confused about how daemons relate to the story ( and seeing what you wrote about torture, I'd say you ARE ) ask me.
I didnt say ' heres a blank check to generally rip up my story and categorize its bleeding shreds '
I refuse to offer explanation of my work, people can take what they want from it, and what they find in it.
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Post by Spiral Sun on Feb 3, 2005 1:16:22 GMT -5
*Shrugs* your story, I only juged it because TU did (but I think that was more out of his disgust) and you don't have to be in the contest to recieve constructive criticism. All I meant about the audience is that you should thik about who you want to read your story, other than you, but maybe people like you. And that's why it's recieved the bad press. *nodds head* yeah, I don't understand the dæmon-relatedness, so it'd be good if you explained, even if you don't want to give an explanation. I had originally been thinking it was a work which reflected how you felt and by explanation for that I ment it metaphorically. Not as in "the prince fucked her because I was raped"- not saying that you were but more in context, you don't need to say why you feel that way because I don't want to intrude into your life, and you wouldn't want me to either. As for catagorising into different sections isn't my style, but it's how TU wants the judging done so I just went with it. As fir the ripping it to shreads, I'm sorry about that but I thought you might want a reason for my scores and also I have to do that all the time to texts in school- not rip them (I wish), but analyse them incase I'm not explaining my self properly, I have a habit of that  |
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Post by Aleandra on Feb 3, 2005 6:11:12 GMT -5
On how much do we mark? 10? 20? I'll mark it on 10. Here's the style judging, as an example too see how I mark. Lee tell me if you don't want this here and i'll modify.
Now I was on the fence. The style is a bit uneven in the story itself: i'm not talking about the fact that it's free style-ish, but in some places the even flow changes suddenly for no reason.
(example: in some phrases you see a subject, and in others there isn't. i found the "subject-less" parts more poeic and perhaps closer to the "flow of though" style you were setting. dunno if you see where i'm going)
But what I really liked was the ending: very well done. As if with every phrase, a heart beat.
So, style: 6-/10
(although TU, I think that sequence and style go together, it's not easy to seperate them and when you do there's nothing left. sequence is part of the writing style. I mean If Spiral doesn't object could we fuse the two together?)
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