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Post by Tyrannus et Callida on Jan 10, 2005 17:53:29 GMT -5
Insanity – By TyrannisUmbra
The minds of all shall be purged
By the imminent mental surge.
With swift thought the mind aches,
Anchored it grows restless.
Fiery love, icy hate.
The mind will be forced to fight, lest this
Instability devour it.
Darkness of fear,
Light of hope,
All shall destroy,
For the mind cannot cope.
Not one can survive such chaos.
High above the wreckage
My mind watches, wanders,
Separate, secluded, alone.
Trapped in a prison of its own,
And to its erosion, blind, yet aware.
The stronger it becomes, the worse it will fare.
Strength of mind fuels it.
The wider the thought,
The more it will fade.
Descent into Chaos,
Complete destruction,
Which none can survive.
Spirit empty,
Soul distorted,
Body sure of its destination,
Bereft of doubt.
Yet in the end we wonder,
Did this madness push inward… or out?
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How'd you like it? I find it scary, deep, and meaningful. Madness... we cannot escape it, for it comes from within ourselves.
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Tracy
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Post by Tracy on Jan 10, 2005 17:59:55 GMT -5
(*gives standing ovation for the poetic genius*)
Bravo! Bravo! So very dark and meaningful! *Cries out* I love it! I love it!! ;D
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Dan
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Does this form bear finality?
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Post by Dan on Jan 10, 2005 18:02:32 GMT -5
excellent, truely excellant.
Its interesting, isn't it, that there are so many poems about insanity on this forum, mine is somewhere around here and I think there might be one by somebody who doesn't come here anymore SOMEWHERE.
Again, GREAT work!!!
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Post by Annie on Jan 10, 2005 18:12:03 GMT -5
That's wonderful ^^
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Post by Tyrannus et Callida on Jan 10, 2005 18:36:29 GMT -5
*Bows*
Well, it is a popular topic, isn't it? But, I think I hit it on the nose, if you would excuse the cliché.<br>
It truly says it all, doesn't it?
*Bows again*
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Post by StephXZed on Jan 10, 2005 23:46:13 GMT -5
Bravo! *Applaudes happily*
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Post by rave & phair on Jan 11, 2005 16:16:42 GMT -5
"Scary, deep, and meaningful" says it best. ^^
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Alexei & Kryii
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Post by Alexei & Kryii on Mar 13, 2005 0:11:31 GMT -5
Okay, I always like to point out style things. Mostly cuz everyone else always gets the meaning, so I'm left with nothing new to say  Anyhoo, at first, I wanted to scream at the varying rhyme pattern. But when I read it a second time, it fit so well. The chaos of your approach is, simply put, perfect for the subject. You give it some form so that we can follow it, but then you hammer at us from within the form, throwing our perceptions helter-skelter and kitty-corner. Me likies. |
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Post by cock of teh walk on Mar 13, 2005 0:19:08 GMT -5
idjust like to say, yall are the most normal sane people i have ever met in my life. almost excruiatingly so.
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Kamy
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Post by Kamy on Mar 13, 2005 11:51:53 GMT -5
its good
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Post by Tyrannus et Callida on Mar 13, 2005 13:56:58 GMT -5
The chaos of your approach is, simply put, perfect for the subject. You give it some form so that we can follow it, but then you hammer at us from within the form, throwing our perceptions helter-skelter and kitty-corner. Me likies. To tell you the truth, I didn't really think too much about it. All I really actively did was give it some rhyme, a word choice that gives it a dark edge, and the powerful effect of the last line. The rest just... is what it is. I don't really ever pay attention to what I write in the way of, "Well, I want this to go here... Here I'll put this...", but instead I just write what I write in a way that fits to me. |
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Alexei & Kryii
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[Corleone]Whiskas? I don't need no stinkin' Whiskas.[/Corleone]
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Post by Alexei & Kryii on Mar 13, 2005 15:15:37 GMT -5
To tell you the truth, I didn't really think too much about it. All I really actively did was give it some rhyme, a word choice that gives it a dark edge, and the powerful effect of the last line. The rest just... is what it is. I don't really ever pay attention to what I write in the way of, "Well, I want this to go here... Here I'll put this...", but instead I just write what I write in a way that fits to me. I find that when I write and try to force the form, it falls apart pretty quick. So I understand that it was unconscious, something you ddn't really consider. I never do. Nonetheless, it remains very well done in that regard. I think that means you really are a good poet, then, mhmm, ^^ |
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