My songs, Id better not hear anyone use these

[Kamy]

These are just some songs and tunes I make up, I write all my tunes in tabs.

some cool tabs:
|---------0-| (X2)
|-------0---|
|--0-0------|
|------------|
|------------|
|------------|

|---------0-| (X2)
|-------2---|
|--0-0------|
|------------|
|------------|
|------------|

|---------2-| (X2)
|-------0---|
|--0-0------|
|------------|
|------------|
|------------|

|---------1-| (X2)
|-------0---|
|--0-0------|
|------------|
|------------|
|------------|

|---------0-| (X2)
|-------0---|
|--2-2------|
|------------|
|------------|
|------------|

|---------0-| (X2)
|-------2---|
|--2-2------|
|------------|
|------------|
|------------|

|---------2-| (X2)
|-------2---|
|--2-2------|
|------------|
|------------|
|------------|

Try that, it actually sounds pretty good high or low notes.

Songs: Alone (I'm not good with names)

Whan you
Puch me around
When you
Hold me down
When you
Hold me back
And you
Don't even care about me
You just
Want your own way
You can't
Always have what you want
It's just
The way things are
You'll never
Make me give in
To your
Sick sense of humor
I will
Run away from you
So I
Never have to see you
Again

How I
Always think of you
How I
Always try to impress you
When you
Always walk around on top of me
And you
Know that I hate it
But you
Still do it anyways
Its like
You're a robot
You have
No feelings for this life
You have
No consideration for the world
And then
You turn your back on me
And you
Make fun of me
And now
I feel like fleeing this battle
So you
Lie in the dirt
And I'll
Never have to see you
Again

I can't believe you never
Think about me / Look at me
If you will just look back
See our past / Don't make me
Hurt you / Somehow leave you
Just be nice to me and
Listen / Don't turn your back on me
Just stay with me / And I know
We will be fine / But I won't
If you leave me here all
Alone





--- PLEASE CRITICISE! YOU ARE SIMON FROM AMERICAN IDOL TELL ME WHAT YOU THINK!

[rave & phair]

I don't know what the tabs mean, but the lyrics are cool. They remind me of the Three Days Grace/Nickleback/Default genre. Yay angst. ^^
A chorus would be nice though; some sense of structure.

[Kamy]

the last litte paragraph is a chorus. not much I agree, but look at some linkin park songs chorus'

[rave & phair]

Good point. I see now.

[Kamy]

good. so wut do others think?

[Addy]

I sort of understand the tabs thing, but not quite. I don't really listen to linkin park or three days grace, but I do love Boulevard of Broken Dreams, by Green Day. Please read my lyrics:

TANGLED UP
VERSE 1
Everyday we walk out the door
everyday we look in the mirror
and everyday we just get tangled up and
die

REFRAIN/CHORUS
I don't want to be like this
I don't want to be here, no more
take my hand and fly into heaven
give me wings so that I can
fly



just read that and tell me how I did

[Kamy]

every day we walk these streets
every day we look at our feet
every day we lose a soul
to this unlikely world that nobody
knows


hm, I think I may have found a second verse to your song. the feet thing symbolizes low self-confidence, and it pretty much mixes with the rest of the song.

[Addy]

Pretty good, Kamy! Actually, I have a second verse and a third, however, I don't think the second is very good....

TANGLED UP CONTINUED...

I stand near your side
near the left side
and I confess to God that I lie

(chorus)

Take my hand and climb into heaven
give me wings so I can live
once again... once again...

(chorus)

every day we walk these streets
every day we look at our feet
every day we lose a soul
to this unlikely world that nobody
knows

does that sound good? I don't think you would like me to use your words, though...

[Kamy]

hm, instead of

I stand near your side
near the left side
and I confess to God that I lie

use my words, then put the chorus in again, then put those words then chorus, then the ending

[Kamy]

like this way:

Everyday we walk out the door
everyday we look in the mirror
and everyday we just get tangled up and
die

I don't want to be like this
I don't want to be here, no more
take my hand and fly into heaven
give me wings so that I can
fly

every day we walk these streets
every day we look at our feet
every day we lose a soul
to this unlikely world that nobody
knows

chorus

I stand near your side
near the left side
and I confess to God that I lie

chorus

Take my hand and climb into heaven
give me wings so I can live
once again... once more
LET ME LIVE MY OWN LIFE!

[Addy]

Great!

[Kamy]

glad i can help Addy.

[Addy]

thanks.

[Kamy]

ur velcome