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Post by Darkshadow on Apr 28, 2005 13:20:34 GMT -5
I like that poem. A good, old-fashioned, cheerful, entertaining piece of complete nonsense. Cool!  |
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Post by |3200k1 on Apr 28, 2005 15:42:15 GMT -5
ridiculously whimsical, but i like it...it got published actually, only in some rubbish anthology thing tho. Gotta start somewhere. I liked it though. it reminded me of the butterslices with wings in alice in wonderland. |
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Post by Kiba on Apr 28, 2005 16:37:46 GMT -5
rhymes well kind of an interesting thought.
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Alexei & Kryii
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Post by Alexei & Kryii on Apr 30, 2005 16:37:22 GMT -5
I so like cheerful poetry, despite what I share...
I write it. I just don't think that what I write now that is so whimsical is really as good as the others. That doesn't mean I don't still do it. Maybe I can find some older whimsical poems... hmmm...
Oooookay. Techincal things. I like the rythm you've got here. The only real thing that throws me off just a little bit is the last two lines, although I can see where they come from. The beat seems to waver there, is all.
Otherwise, good stuff, ^^
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Post by Tyrannus et Callida on Apr 30, 2005 16:44:14 GMT -5
It's the kind of poem that makes you think.
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Post by Lulu on May 5, 2005 5:33:18 GMT -5
i think of poems when lulu doesn't meet me to walk to school... so i think i had to end that one fast. I'm sowwy >.< But hey, if things like that are made, I'll never wait for you! I mean...turn up...or....something...:S Anywho, I guess I'm basically saying I think it's cool. |
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