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Sept 24, 2004 15:09:07 GMT -5
Post by rave & phair on Sept 24, 2004 15:09:07 GMT -5
*huge smile* Thanks.
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Sept 24, 2004 16:21:10 GMT -5
Post by Zen on Sept 24, 2004 16:21:10 GMT -5
you're more than welcome, m'dear. ^^ even though mine didn't get any comments, rawr. but i guess it wasn't very good anywho. >.< falel: ::smack:: heh. i'll shut up now and not be jealous. good job. XD
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Sept 24, 2004 17:29:04 GMT -5
Post by Kirjavi on Sept 24, 2004 17:29:04 GMT -5
Hey what are you talking about? I loved yours! It was very well written. Kir loved it too so smack her Falel. She doesn't know how talented she really is.
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Sept 24, 2004 18:31:16 GMT -5
Post by Zen on Sept 24, 2004 18:31:16 GMT -5
falel: :: promptly smacks :: zen: ow. o.o falel: i'm not physical. that shouldn't hurt. zen: >>; i knew that.
thank you, kir ^^
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Sept 24, 2004 19:42:04 GMT -5
Post by Joshua on Sept 24, 2004 19:42:04 GMT -5
*wishes he could write like Raven* That's amazing, Raven. I haven't seen a better poet(or poetess, let's be pedantic), from the last 30 years. You should fill a book with that, you're very talented. See, unlike most of the others, I am not speechless. I can give a lot of praise. I'm never speechless. I could ramble for hours, see? I haven't got anything better to do with my time. Maybe I should shut up now?
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Sept 25, 2004 10:43:37 GMT -5
Post by Addy on Sept 25, 2004 10:43:37 GMT -5
Yes, that was quite good, I'll admit. I not very good......
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Sept 29, 2004 20:14:23 GMT -5
Post by Zen on Sept 29, 2004 20:14:23 GMT -5
believe me, addy, you're better than some. there were kids in my advanced english class last year who couldn't write that well.... then again, they weren't all that advanced, either. just less stupid than most. okay. basically what i'm trying to say is that your poetry isn't as bad as you think it is. >>;;;;;;;
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Oct 13, 2004 12:06:34 GMT -5
Post by ice on Oct 13, 2004 12:06:34 GMT -5
This poem is in connecion with the 'I feel torn in two' thing that I said. I should have some pics up soon about that too. I came up with it in, like, 15 minutes. In the dark. Yeah.
The Choice
A war wages inside of me, Weaves of cruelty being sown. And as the moon, high above, I have a dark side that has never shown. It lives inside of me, waiting, And grows whenever I fail. It is a creature of the dark, Skin, cold and pale. But there, shining in a lone glimmer of moonlight Stands a beast radiating an aura of hope. The forces clash, tearing away at their non-existant flesh. And there I stand, caught in the melee between myself and I, Terrified. I fear not death, nor loneliness, nor pain or bruise, My only fear is being forced to choose.
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Oct 13, 2004 17:07:02 GMT -5
Post by Zen on Oct 13, 2004 17:07:02 GMT -5
But there, shining in a lone glimmer of moonlight Stands a beast radiating an aura of hope.
i don't know what made me do it, but i cried when i read that.
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Oct 13, 2004 17:43:37 GMT -5
Post by Addy on Oct 13, 2004 17:43:37 GMT -5
liar... *feels very pleased with herself* actually, you are all better poets and poetesses than I.
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Oct 13, 2004 18:57:23 GMT -5
Post by Addy on Oct 13, 2004 18:57:23 GMT -5
Set my Soul Free
Lost in the world of labeled children, I stand alone. different in everyway, unique, I stand alone. "It's just a fase that will one day fade away," I'm told but I can't seem to hold the truth that I have, the possibilities that I have seen.
set my soul free release me let me be apart from the crowds of children that swamp the hallway.
have you ever pondered at why people stay in groups? or wondered have they ever been truly happy? truly sad? have they felt what I have? what I have seen?
set my soul free release me let me be apart from the crowds of children that swamp the hallway.
exoticness blesses me ordinaryness scorns me. complexed is my passion as I cry for my race and I place a grin on my face
set my soul free release me let me be apart from the crowds of children that swamp the hallway.
I am at my limit now. I barely am open to strangers but makes you differ? why ask stupid questions when you know the answer? why talk to me when you have thousands of friends?
set my soul free release me let me be apart from the crowds of children that swamp the hallway.
yet you seem not the same as the others that I have come across; your not as plain as your average student
I see it in your eyes there is a haunting and many are a-taunting your soul’s form is a leopard and mine a tiger but we can not mix-- stripes and spots aren’t a very good fix
but if you.... but if you.... if you....
If you set my soul free then maybe I’ll unfasten yours.
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Oct 28, 2004 8:41:50 GMT -5
Post by rave & phair on Oct 28, 2004 8:41:50 GMT -5
Roar. I love those, Addy and ice. Especially: "caught in the melee between myself and I" and "your soul’s form is a leopard and mine a tiger but we can not mix-- stripes and spots aren’t a very good fix" because I love the dæmon allusions.
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Oct 28, 2004 16:52:54 GMT -5
Post by Kiba on Oct 28, 2004 16:52:54 GMT -5
wow that was good. very good job there
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Oct 28, 2004 17:04:10 GMT -5
Post by Addy on Oct 28, 2004 17:04:10 GMT -5
thank you! I was thinking of this forum when I wrote of that.... ;D also George of the Jungle when Ursula's mum is talking about how George can't marry Ursela Thanky Thankies!!!
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Oct 29, 2004 8:04:44 GMT -5
Post by Jim on Oct 29, 2004 8:04:44 GMT -5
Awesome!
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