Dan
dæmian
Does this form bear finality?
Posts: 405
|
Post by Dan on Jan 7, 2005 22:24:16 GMT -5
The bond stretches, and shrinks, inner starfire mixing with the shining light of the mind
The bonds stretch tight, the starry skies that they are ceasing their merging
Blurs of thought shine down these lines, and so they shine until the temporary existence is forever ended.
Yet see, for now the bond severs, thoughts pumping out like the life they link would when its shell is shattered.
Look now, for the bond forever sundered, flails about, an unearthly force emanating.
Light shines upon the sundered halves, but instead of nourishing, burns like frozen lances of flame, forever burning yet forever stilled.
This poem was written in about 2 minutes, yet I don't really know what it is about, or why I wrote it, perhaps it is simply a byproduct of being tired, but I almost felt like I was being spoken through, like the words were not my own. Dal got a bit uneasy at one point, but I am not REALLY sure why, I ahve my theories, but I won't bore you to death with them.
|
|
|
|
Post by Spiral Sun on Jan 7, 2005 22:27:15 GMT -5
I dunno what it is, but I liiiiike it!
|
|
Ditto
dæmian
Ceiday- 12/20/04
Posts: 139
|
Post by Ditto on Jan 7, 2005 23:05:59 GMT -5
Wow, that poem is really pretty 00 I could tell you my opinion on the whole "spoken through"thing, just don't think i'm insane alright? Well, I was thinking Spirit Guide(A bit like your daemon, only they are like mentors or well, guides...)but you said Dal got uneasy...So, im not really sure...  |
|
|
|
Post by Spiral Sun on Jan 7, 2005 23:13:54 GMT -5
I've read up on Spirit guides, they sound very interesting, but I haven't been able to get in touch with mine.....
Maybe Dal was uneasy because it was a new guide?
|
|
|
|
Post by rave & phair on Jan 8, 2005 12:47:53 GMT -5
It sounds... unearthly, almost. I know what you mean by being "spoken through"; it's happened to me, and this poem does sound like it's a byproduct of that. It's good. Is it titled?
|
|
|
|
Post by Tyrannus et Callida on Jan 8, 2005 14:38:05 GMT -5
Sounds like something has awakened within you.
Perhaps your thoughts have begun to stretch beyond the normal bounds?
I know for a fact that I think on a different level than most everyone else. I often get that feeling that something is speaking through me, using my body and mind as a catalyst. It happens most often when I am writing my fanfics or drawing pictures.
EDIT: Oh, and I like it.
|
|
|
|
Post by StephXZed on Jan 8, 2005 16:13:26 GMT -5
I like strange poems. The best ones always write themselves, you know?  |
|
