Jim
dæmian
Kemo'Kai
Posts: 120
|
Post by Jim on Aug 18, 2004 8:08:39 GMT -5
Another Haiku piece Kemo'Kai watching Wanting, feeling, aching, being Everything in me. ( My first attempt at Haiku , if you don't like it please tell me.)
|
|
|
Post by Cat on Aug 18, 2004 8:37:24 GMT -5
All very nice poems. Give me a moment, let's see if I can't add one. I love poetry. Limericks and Haiku are among my specialities. But ... I don't even want to try Haiku for a dæmon poem, considering "Pandareos" would be nearly a whole line.
|
|
Jim
dæmian
Kemo'Kai
Posts: 120
|
Post by Jim on Aug 18, 2004 8:39:56 GMT -5
Good Point
|
|
|
Post by ice on Aug 22, 2004 9:15:14 GMT -5
Oh beautiful Lass How often you've shown yourself In my lonely soul. I felt like writing one.
|
|
Jim
dæmian
Kemo'Kai
Posts: 120
|
Post by Jim on Aug 22, 2004 11:47:31 GMT -5
Sad and beautiful at the same time, very nice
|
|
|
Post by ice on Aug 22, 2004 11:48:43 GMT -5
Thank you.
|
|
Jim
dæmian
Kemo'Kai
Posts: 120
|
Post by Jim on Aug 22, 2004 11:53:02 GMT -5
Having wrote one myself I know how hard it is to write about daemons.
|
|
|
Post by ice on Aug 22, 2004 11:57:49 GMT -5
Not really for me. I could use: Lass - 1 syllable Lassut - 2 syllables I've got the cute cat song stuck in my head.
|
|
|
Post by maia on Aug 22, 2004 12:28:08 GMT -5
Oh beautiful Lass How often you've shown yourself In my lonely soul. I felt like writing one. Awwwwwwwwww........................
|
|
|
Post by ice on Aug 23, 2004 10:20:59 GMT -5
Thanx. I'm making a few more, and they'll probably be posted near the weekend
|
|
|
Post by Rsaee on Aug 28, 2004 22:19:17 GMT -5
This wont seem directly related to dæmons , but it really did come directly from Roak, and it has alot of meaning for us. Hopefully someone else will get something from it as well . Try and read it slowly
I dream The sea. It falls . My heart is wide and yet The sea I cry for days the moon It loves My lips they bleed [nonsense] The fall. I chide A man. so green Im scared to die My life. It craves The words . Wont come Agree the yes Poison leaks. My world will fall The [To]day moves on And we all [Breathe] again
|
|
|
Post by rave & phair on Aug 31, 2004 17:32:54 GMT -5
I loved all of these--especially Augury's and Rsaee's.
The first I wrote around March and posted in the LJ community (before I knew much about poetry, note):
Twenty-one grams is not a lot of weight. A jaguar would not weigh that little, And neither would a cheetah. A peacock would not, And certainly not a raven. A quetzal would not weigh twenty-one grams, Even if its resplendant tail was left out. And even the little iridescent three-inch swallow Probably weighs more than that. But when that jaguar, tail waving, helps you stand your ground, Or when that raven whispers kind words to you while perching on your shoulder, Or when that little swallow hops upon your finger And sings a lilting tune, Twenty-one grams is an awful lot of weight.
The second, a haiku I [tried] to write after reading these posts.
A soul-raven flies Chained by life to his human But he doesn't mind
I'm feeling rather philosophical.
|
|
augury
dæmian
human: augury / daemon: kelan
Posts: 101
|
Post by augury on Aug 31, 2004 20:23:25 GMT -5
i really like your poem, rsaee! you have a very unique style of writing, which lends itself well to being read aloud. the use of brackets is intruiging, too.
|
|
|
Post by Rsaee on Sept 1, 2004 11:35:32 GMT -5
:)thanks alot. i would never have posted it any where but online though. Raven i liked yours, the one where you said you didnt know much about poetry.
|
|
|
Post by Darkshadow on Sept 1, 2004 16:30:20 GMT -5
Empty without you, The essence of my being, Silvix my daemon. But complete with you, My only beloved one, My guide forever. Far back in the past, The day that I became whole, Silvix's cieday. What do you guys think?
|
|